So this is how the story goes:
One...
Forget, forget, forget she knows.
Two...
So this is how the tale is told:
Three...
Think not, think not of joys of old.
Four...
So this is how the plot is played:
Five...
Cry on, cry on, the price is paid.
Six...
So this is how life breathes and thrives:
Seven...
Walk on and on and on our lives.
Eight...
So this is how the mind decides:
Nine...
Habit, habit, habit confides.
Ten...
So this is how the world will turn:
Eleven...
Repeat, repeat, and never learn.
Twelve...
So this is how the heart is lost:
...
Break the rhythm, count the cost.
I really enjoyed the innovativeness of your writing here. I loved the repetition of the lines and the rhythmic flow your your word choice. I feel the use of the numbers was really creative but it was unnecessary. I read the poem without them and thought the flow was a lot more clear. I don't understand the meaning behind your use in the numbers. My advice to you would be to make the poem more clear on the meaning so that the reader can at least relate a little more. Give more visuals so we can understand what you mean and why you used the numbers. I loved loved loved the poem but it left me feeling very confused. Good and creative work.
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